Let's jazz this place up Poetry style! Musical twist included.

[Ravi]

Ok, people, VOTING TIME!

The voting will go allong with the new voting system:
Just fill this in:
5pts to _____
4pts to _____
3pts to _____


The first participant to accomplish a total of 20 votes will be a winner!
(May be liable to change, depends upon animo)

Unfortunately dropped out. I wish you all the best and I hope everything will work out for you.

Ravi -

Casey Jones

Driving that train, high on cocaine,
Casey jones is ready, watch your speed.
Trouble ahead, trouble behind,
And you know that notion just crossed my mind.

This old engine makes it on time,
Leaves central station bout a quarter to nine,
Hits river junction at seventeen to,
At a quarter to ten you know its travlin again.

Driving that train, high on cocaine,
Casey jones is ready, watch your speed.
Trouble ahead, trouble behind,
And you know that notion just crossed my mind.

Trouble ahead, lady in red,
Take my advice youd be better off dead.
Switchmans sleeping, train hundred and two is
On the wrong track and headed for you.

Driving that train, high on cocaine,
Casey jones is ready, watch your speed.
Trouble ahead, trouble behind,
And you know that notion just crossed my mind.

Trouble with you is the trouble with me,
Got two good eyes but you still dont see.
Come round the bend, you know its the end,
The fireman screams and the engine just gleams...

Driving that train, high on cocaine,
Casey jones is ready, watch your speed.
Trouble ahead, trouble behind,
And you know that notion just crossed my mind.

Hey there woman, get off that track.
‘Cause once you go there, you cannot go back.
And Casey Jones well, he will not slow down!
That choo-choo train has to get into town.

Driving that train, high on cocaine,
Casey jones is ready, watch your speed.
Trouble ahead, trouble behind,
And you know that notion just crossed my mind.

Cargo is full, that train’s gotta pull.
The cocaine’s fly, are you ready to die?
What are you doing? Oh woman in red.
Three puffs smoke, and she’s already dead.

Flying that train, high on cocaine,
Casey Jones is riding, better take heed.
Lady in red, she was so blind!
And you know that Casey, will pay back in kind.

Godslafco -

Still Misunderstood

He sittin in a basement with a wrench in hand
Only thing he could do was tinkerin
Thrown out from his home and his profession and
His family, all disowning him
Tellin him he could do no better than
Dunkin Donuts if he's lucky then
A dentist, all of a sudden it comes back to him
His plan, his dream of betterin
His fellows, all those helpless men
In this home he's crying and, boom all of a sudden it's
No longer him and them, it's about God and all his children, then
He saying Oh how I wish someone had saved us again

Baby, you understand me now
If sometimes you see that I'm mad
No one can always be an angel
When everything goes wrong you see some bad
Well I'm just a soul whose intentions are good
Oh Lord, please don't let me be misunderstood

[Common]
Yeah, uh (Misunderstood)
We do this, for the people that walk that path
Tryna get to their dream, yeah, uh (oh)

He stood on the corner with the rest of them
Though he knew that this corner wasn't the best of him
Hard streets and a life that crested him
Dirt police domestic beefs that's festerin
He knew the President wadn't addressin him
Though dead presidents was undressin him
Two kids from hot sex no protection and
People don't see how AIDS is affectin 'em
It get hard to get the get the God question in
Can't find a job so you robbin and hustlin
He killed marks and sold dope for cousin 'em
Can't believe they would be the ones bucking him
He on the ground he could feel God touching him
He heard the sound of his moms sayin trust in him
At heaven's gate, saying please Lord let me in
Or send me back to tell my people to be better men

[Chorus]
Misunderstood
'Cause we are - Misunderstood
Misunderstood, Don't let me be misunderstood
I'm just human, oh

[Common]
Uh, yeah
She dancin she dance she dance for them
Her body move but her mind was manic'n
Thinkin I don't know where they hands have been
Relationships with men have been so damagin
She thought back to when she was at Howard and
Dreams of doing scenes with Terrence Howard and
Broadway plays and dancin with Alv and them
The ones that make it always ain't the talented
Some dreams get lost never to be found again
At first strippin seemed so empowerin
Most every girl wanna do it now and then
But bein meat every day is devourin
Cats puttin paper where she put powder and
Life would break her, now she powderin
She was high when she fell down and then
Crowd surrounding and, heart was poundin and
She fell into a deep sleep the siren sounded and
Seen bright lights in the midst of clouds and then
Talked to God, feeling like his child again
Said Lord let me live so I can make you proud again

[Chorus]

The life we lead, will always lead us
And we pray that he, will never leave us
It's the price we pay, I guess that's the reason
Why my grandma sang, we all need Jesus [2x]

Misunderstood, don't let me be, misunderstood
Misunderstood, don't let me be, misunderstood
I'm just human

Kai0x -

F-Stop Blues

Hermit crabs and cowry shells
Crush beneath his feet as he comes towards you
He's waving at you

Lift him up to see what you can see
He begins his focusing
He's aiming at you

And now he has cutaways from memories
And close-ups of anything that
He has seen or even dreamed
And now he's finished focusing

He's imagining lightning
Striking sea sickness
Away from here

Look who's laughing now that you've wasted
How many years and you've barely even tasted
Anything remotely close to
Everything you've boasted about
Look who's crying now

Driftwood floats, after years of erosion
Incoming tide touches roots to expose them,
Quicksand steals my shoe,
Clouds bring the f-stop blues

Look who's laughing now that you've wasted
How many years and you've barely even tasted
Anything remotely close to
Everything you've boasted about
Look who's crying now

Look Who’s Crying Now

With the press of a button, it begins
His life unraveled in the rolls of film
Exposing his heart, behind the lens,
He gradually learns to live
As he restlessly escapes her hands
And crawls towards the camera
Feet dragging in the sand
Desperate for strength and liberty,
He struggles to his feet
He stumbles towards you
Reaching for you
Unable to touch you
And angered by his failure
He begins to cry
His weakness, that sickness
Creeping behind his eyes

But the camera has stop filming
And his tears have long since gone
He doesn't know you, he never touched you
But look who's laughing now that you've wasted,
How many years and you've barely even tasted,
Oh look who's crying now

Martzu -

Unpleasantly vain

Alone in the darkness is whispered your name
Together amiss, eventually hated is your game

Hurting kind of caring. Type, deep red bane
Open all up, do not leave it to one vein
Holding back, can not leave poisonous domain

What is left, nothing valuable to contain
Throw away garbage, worthless to attain
Can it be amusing, can you entertain?

Was contaminating our minds truly the aim?
Conclusion to this, it was still all the same
Unable to deliver required fame

Was it fun to you? Are you genuinely so plain?
Go find someone else to bug, you are lame!

Song lyrics
Don't lie to me
you're high on something
and we ain't friends
so let's not pretend

and go ahead
and bleed for them
you got a pretty face
and you're so intense

a rebel without a cause
you're so pass
{ naughty naughty }
a devil without the horns
and the tail
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
naughty boy
{ naughty naughty }

you used to live
just like a king
red carpet was
but it was yesterday
it was yesterday

you're name
in hall of fame
and you would dare
just cause you didn't care

a rebel without a cause
you're so pass
{ naughty naughty }
a devil without the horns
and the tail
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
naughty boy
{ naughty naughty }

a devil without the horns
and a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
a devil without the horns
oh you're so
a rebel without the cause
oh you're so lame

a rebel without a cause
you're so pass
{ naughty naughty }
a devil without the horns
and the tail
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
naughty boy
{ naughty naughty }

a rebel without a cause x3
naughty boy

{ naughty naughty }

Subject: I challenge you all to a poetry face off! Again!
Contestants: 6 to the max. (including me)
Entry lenght: Max. 300 words.
Time limit: June the 1st
The twist: Yes there is one again. This time there's a music theme! So think hard and deep about the songs you like, because they are going to be your inspiration!
Lyrics in music can be a lot more intricate and meaningfull then some people suspect. So it could be nice to take a song you like and write a poem arround it. It can be influenced in any way possible, you can use your song's meaning as a direct inspiration, you can write a poem about the song itself, you could expand upon the song or you could even use some aspects of the song and build arround it.
The sky is the limit!
The winner:

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3pts to ____
2pts to ____
1pts to ____

The first participant to accomplish a total of 20 votes will be a winner!
(May be liable to change, depends upon animo)

So, looks like we can try to get at it again people. I'm sure there are plenty of people who can get pretty lyrical about music and of course repurcussion is allways a good way to drive up some spirits!
For fame, fortune and respect!
I really hope we get a good turnup!


Edit/Update: Ok people, here we go! Everyone do a piece and be sure to post a youtube/download link to the song in your entry-post as well (preferably even both). It's very easy to use Send big files the easy way. Files too large for email attachments? No problem! or YouTube - Broadcast Yourself. to upload/look up your songs ^_^
If there's any trouble or if you have any questions, PM me =D


The contestants:

-Ravi
-4thseal
-kai0x
-Martzu
-godslafco

Figured I'd add download links for people who are interested.

Grateful Dead - Casey Jones
Killer - Naughty Boy
Jack Johnson - F-stop blues
Common - Misunderstood

[4thseal]

in!

hachacha

[kai0x]

I'm in . Awesome subject dude, lyrics are some of the best poetry

[Martzu]

I woudn't mind being in too. If just accepted...

[godslafco]

I also, though unproven, would like to be in this fray

[4thseal]

^The only things you ever have to prove are to yourself . And, welcome aboard ^^.

[Ravi]

Just one more people!

Thank you all for entering, I love all of you for it <3

[kai0x]

Hey why don't we just settle with who we have already and get the ball rolling?

[Ravi]

Originally Posted by kai0x

Hey why don't we just settle with who we have already and get the ball rolling?

Ya, true, was waiting for a bit, then got caught in studying and forget it for a bit. We're in no hurry though, anyhow I'll update the first post... do you think it would be necisarry to PM the contestants with a reminder?

[Martzu]

It's not bad idea to PM everyone and give them reminder =P

One thing though came in mind. Are we allowed to write poem to/from song that is not in English?

[Ravi]

Originally Posted by Martzu

It's not bad idea to PM everyone and give them reminder =P

One thing though came in mind. Are we allowed to write poem to/from song that is not in English?

That's good.

I'll allow it, IF the poem itself is in English and thus understandable by everyone, AND you give us the song and include a full accurate translation to English of the original song.


haha, I'm a tough-ball xD, ok, I'll send some PM-reminders soon.

[Ravi]

Ok, guise, delivery day! I suspect some of you have forgotten about this, so peepz who don't put something down at the end of the day I'll send a pokey-PM too =p

And damn, this was hard to decide, frist I was thiking of Money for Nothing by the dire Straits, then pondered on some Zeppelin (of course =p), hell even Tony Scott's Music for Zen Meditation came to mind. But eventually, I chose 'Casey Jones' by 'the Grateful Dead'. Which is an excellent song if I may say so myself =p

So, what a did was make my own continuation, or lyrics for the song, I took the chorus out of the original song, so don't take any notice of that.

and by all means, SING ALLONG! XD (I know I did, maybe I'll perform this sometime with the band.. If I do I'll show you guise =p)

Casey Jones



Driving that train, high on cocaine,
Casey jones is ready, watch your speed.
Trouble ahead, trouble behind,
And you know that notion just crossed my mind.

Hey there woman, get off that track.
‘Cause once you go there, you cannot go back.
And Casey Jones well, he will not slow down!
That choo-choo train has to get into town.

Driving that train, high on cocaine,
Casey jones is ready, watch your speed.
Trouble ahead, trouble behind,
And you know that notion just crossed my mind.

Cargo is full, that train’s gotta pull.
The cocaine’s fly, are you ready to die?
What are you doing? Oh woman in red.
Three puffs smoke, and she’s already dead.

Flying that train, high on cocaine,
Casey Jones is riding, better take heed.
Lady in red, she was so blind!
And you know that Casey, will pay back in kind.

[Martzu]

My song is Naughty boy by Killer.

Naughty Boy is from their album Sure You Know How to Drive This Thing (2003). Sickeningly Pretty & Unpleasantly Vain is their first albums name, just to let you know where the name for this poem came. Song can be also hear in movie Hymypoika. And that sorta helped to build this poem up too.

Unpleasantly vain

Alone in the darkness is whispered your name
Together amiss, eventually hated is your game

Hurting kind of caring. Type, deep red bane
Open all up, do not leave it to one vein
Holding back, can not leave poisonous domain

What is left, nothing valuable to contain
Throw away garbage, worthless to attain
Can it be amusing, can you entertain?

Was contaminating our minds truly the aim?
Conclusion to this, it was still all the same
Unable to deliver required fame

Was it fun to you? Are you genuinely so plain?
Go find someone else to bug, you are lame!

Song lyrics
Don't lie to me
you're high on something
and we ain't friends
so let's not pretend

and go ahead
and bleed for them
you got a pretty face
and you're so intense

a rebel without a cause
you're so pass
{ naughty naughty }
a devil without the horns
and the tail
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
naughty boy
{ naughty naughty }

you used to live
just like a king
red carpet was
but it was yesterday
it was yesterday

you're name
in hall of fame
and you would dare
just cause you didn't care

a rebel without a cause
you're so pass
{ naughty naughty }
a devil without the horns
and the tail
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
naughty boy
{ naughty naughty }

a devil without the horns
and a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
a devil without the horns
oh you're so
a rebel without the cause
oh you're so lame

a rebel without a cause
you're so pass
{ naughty naughty }
a devil without the horns
and the tail
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
oh you're so lame
{ naughty naughty }
a rebel without a cause
naughty boy
{ naughty naughty }

a rebel without a cause x3
naughty boy

{ naughty naughty }

[4thseal]

hmm...at least i'm not the only one procastinating this xD

Extend the deadline plox? =]

And, real nice entries you two!