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Old 19-04-2008, 04:07 AM   #1
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Just right of the bat, I want to give a little warning here. I was going for the depth and the experience her, something different from the common short story in most forums. So let me know what you guys thing and all. This is just the prologue and I plan to make the chapters even longer, so it will be constant updates, but not extremely often because of the length. Hopefully some people will like it.

EDIT: Sorry about the formatting, for some reason the paragraph indent didn't work.


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Old 19-04-2008, 10:48 AM   #2
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A fantastic read, the prologue was long but enthralling with its plot. I am extremely interested in reading more. It seems like you spent a lot of time developing the plot and that reflects within your post. As for the longer chapters it doesn't matter the length just the quality, judging from what I've read you already have that. You managed to give nice background information without giving away anything, nicely done.
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Old 19-04-2008, 09:13 PM   #3
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Yeah, this was really well written! What a first post my friend, and i hope you do not become a stranger around these parts^^. From the first line, and boy it was a good first line, I was drawn into the story. You style is quite good and your attention to detail shows. You've done a lot of good things with this intro, especially painting a scene rather than simply providing back story. I appreciate this, and the whole tale is very fasinating. I too would like to read more and look forward to your presence in this section!

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Old 19-04-2008, 10:17 PM   #4
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I so hope you will continue this story. I want to desperately know what will happen to Aisling. Thank you for sharing ^^
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Thanks for the comments, Chapter 1 is coming along slowly, but I will try to finish up before the end of the week, because thats when I loose access to my computer, and don't regain it until about the 30th.
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That is good news for me. But I can wait longer too if forced.
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Took a while because once my computer got unhooked I couldn't open any files on there and had to recreate a bit on the laptop. I think the quality may have dropped a bit, which I will definitely try and pick up during the second chapter


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I'm digging this, so you should be proud, as I'm very critical of fantasy stories. I've tried writing so many, but have never been able to manage one that I felt comfortable with. Assassins and the like are my favored characters, so I'm interested to see what you plan to do with a thief-like character. I see Aisling being more of a Drizzt-style character, which is nice to see, as it implies a moral mischievousness. I'm worried that you won't be able to display this in an original way, however, so prove me wrong!

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No chapter for the next 2-3 weeks because I'll be quite busy...