[P] Crosswinds

Jaymes · 04-09-2008, 11:11 PM

The warm winds are blowing,
The dark snows are flowing,
The trees are whistling,
And the skies are glistening,

The days are brighter,
The warm rays are lighter,
The water feels cool,
As we drift in the pool,

Summer comes closer,
Yet I’m no poser,
I’ll admit defeat,
And sound the retreat,

As winter rushes back in,
Our warm, cozy den,
Deep within the forest,
Our ship moorest,

Till dawn break tomorrow,
The skies we’ll borrow,
As we make sail,
With wind on our tail.

Probably my last recent one.

The stig · 05-09-2008, 01:16 AM

This poem was put together nicely.

It describes many things within life itself, which i found very "touching".

I don't want to name any, as i have no idea what you were going for and my mind is set on one thing at the moment, which happens to be around the love area... But i will.

So the first thought that popped in my head was love and loss.

Then i actually thought that, in a sense, this does describe the beginning and end of summer.

It even describes the beginning and the end...

Jaymes · 05-09-2008, 01:54 AM

Thanks man, I hadn't actually thought about it that was as I was writing it.

04-09-2008, 11:11 PM	#1
Jaymes Academy Student Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: In a dark, demented alley, associating with dark wizards Posts: 43 My Mood: Rep Power: 0	[P] Crosswinds The warm winds are blowing, The dark snows are flowing, The trees are whistling, And the skies are glistening, The days are brighter, The warm rays are lighter, The water feels cool, As we drift in the pool, Summer comes closer, Yet I’m no poser, I’ll admit defeat, And sound the retreat, As winter rushes back in, Our warm, cozy den, Deep within the forest, Our ship moorest, Till dawn break tomorrow, The skies we’ll borrow, As we make sail, With wind on our tail. Probably my last recent one. __________________

05-09-2008, 01:16 AM	#2
The stig Niju Shōtai Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: England...one and only Posts: 5,777 My Mood: Rep Power: 16	Re: [P] Crosswinds This poem was put together nicely. It describes many things within life itself, which i found very "touching". I don't want to name any, as i have no idea what you were going for and my mind is set on one thing at the moment, which happens to be around the love area... But i will. So the first thought that popped in my head was love and loss. Then i actually thought that, in a sense, this does describe the beginning and end of summer. It even describes the beginning and the end... __________________

05-09-2008, 01:54 AM	#3
Jaymes Academy Student Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: In a dark, demented alley, associating with dark wizards Posts: 43 My Mood: Rep Power: 0	Re: [P] Crosswinds Thanks man, I hadn't actually thought about it that was as I was writing it. __________________